Villains

First draft

Villains are bad person in the story. In the book “The End” villain is a person name Count Olaf who was always trying to kill people for their legacy. He would do anything for the money. He is an evil, could blood person.

Correct draft

Villains are bad people in the story or tales. In the book “The End” villain is a person name Count Olaf who was always trying to kill people for their legacy. He would do anything for the money. He is an evil, could blood person.

   I find Count Olaf is one of main reason I keep on reading the book. He is a villain but he reflects what lots of people would do when they face money. It is said that people do things for a good reason this guy in the story is following what he think is good reason, money. Without him the whole story gets bored.

Dog Star Quickwrite

Fist draft

I have never had any special relationship with the pets because I am not allow to have pet in the house. People love their pets just because pets spend time with them, you don’t have to have reason to love something. You love it just because you love it, no need for reasoning.

Animal have these qualities that made them human’s best friend:

-        they love us

-        they need us

-        spend time with us when ever we need

-        they are giving their life to us without asking for payback

Draft with corrections

  I have never had any special relationship with the pets because I am not allow to have pet in the house. I think people love their pets just because pets spend time with them, you don’t have to have reason to love something. You love it just because you love it. No need for reasoning.

Animal have these qualities that made them human’s best friend:

-        they love us

-        they need us

-        spend time with us whenever we need

-        they are giving their life to us without asking for anything back


3rd Draft
I have never had any special relationship with the pets because I am not allowed to have pet in the house. I think people love their pets just because pets spend time with them. You don’t have to have reason to love something. You love it just because you love it, no need for reasoning.
Animals have these qualities that made them human’s best friend:

-        they love us

-        they need us

-        spend time with us whenever we need

-        they are giving their life to us without asking for anything back

Dog Star vocab corrections

1.     UC: Her boyfriend and her just break up, now she is sitting in the corner desolation, loss about what just happened.

C: Anna’s boyfriend and Anna just broke up, and now she is feeling desolating lost about what just happened.

2.     UC: Lucy and her friend both love and want to study the stars, they want to be astronomers when they grow up.

C: Lucy and her friend want to be astronomers when they grow up because they both want to study stars.

3.     correct

4.     UC: My new watch is luminous, the glowing light help me to see the time in the dark.

C: The glowing light of my luminous new watch helps me see the time in the dark.

5.     UC: Dad is never misanthropic, for he always love to be in the crowd.

C: My dad is not a misanthropic person because he always loves to be in the crow.

6.     UC: If I am in the moon I will miss the terrestrial food, any Earth food is better than the moon food.

C: My outer space friends always love the terrestrial food and plants I send them because they like anything that is on Earth.

7.     UC: Proud teacher would never thought one day he would default to anything.

C: The proud teacher never thought one day he would by default, to any experiment.

8.     UC: I hate math because the labyrinthine questions always give me bad scrods, so I hate complete thing like math.

C: I hate the labyrinthine puzzles because they are too completed for me.